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in some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why may this be the case. Do you think this is a positive or negative situation.

In the contemporary era , there is an argument over an issue that in certain nations living in
rented
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 house is
considere
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considered
 more beneficial for people , as compared to buying a home . In my
opinion
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 it is a negative development
which
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 has manifold drawbacks , which can be expressed in
upcoming
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 paragraph.
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 way individuals has the pressure on their mind how to manage
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 month for paying
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 .in elaborate it, they do not properly enjoy their life ,
inoder
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in order
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 to they only think in their mind how to save salary to give
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.if folks merely thought about these kinds of things ,it will play
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affect
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 on their mental health.
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,the headline in 'Moscow Time' revealed that in 2017 'USA' citizens affect their health by thinking more and more about their household
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.
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, living in
rent
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 is not a tremendous role
in
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person
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a person
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 life .
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 , people all savings go for paying
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 and it paves the way to depression and tension .to explain it , they do not have enough money to spend on them to live life more joyful and entertain themselves after the hectic lifestyle. Due to
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 human beings suffer from depression, anxiety , tension ,and myriad other problems .since
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 in
price
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the price
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 of rented houses
rocketted
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rocketed
 ,
public
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the public
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 face
plethora
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 of health troubles .
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, in Germany peoples have to suffer from these challenges because
cost
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the cost
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 of living is
to
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 high . To conclude, it is undoubtedly a negative aspect after
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above
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 reason .renting homes
are give
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abundant
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 of problems .

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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