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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is to travel or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Few
people
 claim that various kind of
information
 should be shared as much as possible. Others,
however
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,however
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 thought that the
information
 which has more value should not be shared freely.
This
 essay will discuss both views and will give a reason why necessary
information
 should be shared freely. On the one hand, if the
information
 shared freely,
then
people
 can know about
this
 and able to
use
 in their life. When
information
 will available for everyone,
then
 they can collect and decide whether
this
 will good or bad for them. If they find that knowledge effective for them, they can utilize it in their daily life.
As a result
, they will be benefited when they choose the
information
 for them.
For instance
, when business-related
information
 will available for each individual,
then
 a man who wants to starts a new business, can learn more about business, which will be helpful for him.
On the other hand
, some valuable
information
 which can create a problem for human should not be shared easily. The main reason behind
this
 is
people
 can
use
 the
Information
 to harming society.
For example
, if theory related poison known by everybody,
then
 it brings some problem. Negative minded
people
 can
use
 the
Information
 for harming human beings. So the
information
 which can create a problem for society should not be shared freely. In my opinion, the
information
 which is necessary for
people
 should be shared freely. Because
people
 can gather knowledge from them and can
use
 it in their life. In conclusion, valuable or too important
information
 should not be shared freely because
this
 can be an issue for human.
However
,
information
 which is helpful for human should be shared freely.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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