Nowadays some countries encourage people to buy more and more products, which is good for economy. While others believe it is bad for the society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days several states motivate the population to expend more and more money for consuming some products, which has a positive effect on the state’s economy.
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, some people believe that behaviour affects society negatively. In my opinion, spending capital for buying goods is crucial for an economy but excessive consumption
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harms society.
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, for improving the live standard of inhabitants of one country, it is necessary to increase its GDP.
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, one possibility is to encourage the inhabitants of a state to spend more cash on buying new merchandise and heighten their consumption behaviour.
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, the shop owner, producer of commodities etc. would generate higher revenues, which they could
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spend on paying a higher salary to its employees and improving the working atmosphere by making the workplace safer and state of the art.
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, Tesla benefits greatly from environmental protection and has been able to sell an extremely large number of electric cars.
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, they have gained a lot of income and
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pay exorbitant salaries and have very modern workplaces.
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, excessive consumption of items lowers the money-saving rate, which can lead to people not having saved enough earnings in old age and falling into old-age poverty.
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, it rises wares prices considerably and,
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, many people would not be able to afford plenty of products,
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as new cars, because even small vehicles cost at least 20.000 Euro in Germany. In conclusion, expending capital on buying more and more commodities might have a positive effect on peoples lives but as long as consumerism does not become too excessive, and everyone spends their income only on consumer items.
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