Some people prefer to help or support directly in the local community for people who need it; however, others prefer to give money to the national or private charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Nowadays some individuals rather support or
aid
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those in need in the regional community than giving
money
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to national or private charities. While
other
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prefer to do it vice versa. In my opinion, helping a local community to
aid
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local
people
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who need it, is improves the live quality of a particular region, whereas national or private charities pursue national or global
aid
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projects.
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, promoting a local
aid
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organisation can be done by spending
money
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and/or providing personal support
on site
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. If someone is busy but has plenty of financial resources and still wants to improve the regional standard of living, they can donate
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.
This
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money
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could be
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for building accommodations for homeless
people
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, buying food and clothes or constructing educational facilities.
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,
people
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who want personally assists have the possibility to,
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, distribute food to the vulnerable.
On the other hand
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, national or private
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organisation,
such
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as UNICEF, Médecins Sans Frontiers or Greenpeace, try to combat global suffering,
such
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as famine, epidemics, violence against children or women, child labour, environmental protection, animal welfare etc. Donating
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to those charities reduce
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apply
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global suffering and
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help
people
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around the world. Even if many
people
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only make a small donation, a lot of
money
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can be raised to improve living conditions and living conditions worldwide. In conclusion, assisting a local community aims to help vulnerable local
people
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, whether personally or by donating
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, while giving
money
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to a national or private charity is used to reduce global suffering.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • philanthropy
  • grassroots
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • altruism
  • donation
  • volunteer
  • sponsor
  • beneficiary
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • advocacy
  • impact
  • scalability
  • community development
  • fundraising
  • non-profit sector
  • humanitarian aid
  • social responsibility
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