Some people prefer to help or support directly in the local community for people who need it; however, others prefer to give money to the national or private charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

Nowadays some individuals rather support or
aid
those in need in the regional community than giving
money
to national or private charities. While
other
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prefer to do it vice versa. In my opinion, helping a local community to
aid
local
people
who need it, is improves the live quality of a particular region, whereas national or private charities pursue national or global
aid
projects.
Firstly
, promoting a local
aid
organisation can be done by spending
money
and/or providing personal support
on site
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. If someone is busy but has plenty of financial resources and still wants to improve the regional standard of living, they can donate
money
.
This
money
could be
use
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for building accommodations for homeless
people
, buying food and clothes or constructing educational facilities.
However
,
people
who want personally assists have the possibility to,
for instance
, distribute food to the vulnerable.
On the other hand
, national or private
aid
organisation,
such
as UNICEF, Médecins Sans Frontiers or Greenpeace, try to combat global suffering,
such
as famine, epidemics, violence against children or women, child labour, environmental protection, animal welfare etc. Donating
money
to those charities reduce
the
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global suffering and
to
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help
people
around the world. Even if many
people
only make a small donation, a lot of
money
can be raised to improve living conditions and living conditions worldwide. In conclusion, assisting a local community aims to help vulnerable local
people
, whether personally or by donating
money
, while giving
money
to a national or private charity is used to reduce global suffering.
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  • philanthropy
  • grassroots
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • altruism
  • donation
  • volunteer
  • sponsor
  • beneficiary
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • advocacy
  • impact
  • scalability
  • community development
  • fundraising
  • non-profit sector
  • humanitarian aid
  • social responsibility
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