The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books ,they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi tech media such as computer software, videos, DVDs. To what extent do agree or disagree with this statement.

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books
are playing a paramount role in the life of individuals as
it
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may enrich
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knowledge. It is predominantly considered by a cluster of
like minded
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people that
libraries
should only supply
books
rather than
hi tech
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media
whereas,I believe that ,in today's advanced
technology
time
, it is highly imperative to them to upgrade with
fast moving
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time
and provide contemporary means of source for sharing information
such
as soft
media
,audio and video.
This
essay supports the above statement which will be explained in the subsequent paragraph. There are having
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myriad
grounds
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which will
further
explain
this
argument but the most outstanding reason is that
,
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contemporary
media
is the most expensive and requires
huge
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initial investment which some
libraries
may not afford
such
a big investment due to some circumstances.
Therefore
, as a number of individuals argue,they tend to only focus on maintaining existing assets rather than moving towards fancy
technology
. Apart from
this
, these masses
also
think that
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tech
media
might deviate
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society from the actual purpose of
libraries
nevertheless
owing to vast betterment, numerous types of activities are accessible in soft
media
which may discourage the people from learning that may not be good for their future career. If
libraries
cater to various entertainment
media
like video and audios which may make
students
forget their purpose, the primary purpose of
libraries
would be killed and
students
would have to invest a large amount of
time
surfing on the internet rather than for the sake of learning.
Moreover
,
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reason is that periodically few citizens do not know the rules of
libraries
which lead noise and disturbances for
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as they increase the volume of their audio and video which may not fabulous for
older
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generation but if they read
books
on sitting one place they may
also
know
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of discipline and
time
impotence despite
of
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having
legion
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advantage of
technology
individuals can read
books
on
internet
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the internet
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on any
time
when they want but for
libraries
they have to move another place .one server was conducted on
students
study that ,learns can do their study with
best
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way when they read out from
books
because they have not any social
media
in their surrounding which boast their opportunities of career life. In conclusion,
although
collection
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of
books
contribute
enormous
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factors, if
students
use
technology
while studying they can do more focus on their education.
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