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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books ,they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi tech media such as computer software, videos, DVDs. To what extent do agree or disagree with this statement.

#purpose #libraries #books #waste #resources #space #hi #tech #media #computer #software #videos #dvds
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books
 are playing a paramount role in the life of individuals as
it
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 may enrich
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knowledge. It is predominantly considered by a cluster of
like minded
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 people that
libraries
 should only supply
books
 rather than
hi tech
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media
 whereas,I believe that ,in today's advanced
technology
time
, it is highly imperative to them to upgrade with
fast moving
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time
 and provide contemporary means of source for sharing information
such
 as soft
media
 ,audio and video.
This
 essay supports the above statement which will be explained in the subsequent paragraph. There are having
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myriad
grounds
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 which will
further
 explain
this
 argument but the most outstanding reason is that
,
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contemporary
media
 is the most expensive and requires
huge
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 initial investment which some
libraries
 may not afford
such
 a big investment due to some circumstances.
Therefore
, as a number of individuals argue,they tend to only focus on maintaining existing assets rather than moving towards fancy
technology
. Apart from
this
, these masses
also
 think that
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 tech
media
 might deviate
the
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society from the actual purpose of
libraries
nevertheless
 owing to vast betterment, numerous types of activities are accessible in soft
media
 which may discourage the people from learning that may not be good for their future career. If
libraries
 cater to various entertainment
media
 like video and audios which may make
students
 forget their purpose, the primary purpose of
libraries
 would be killed and
students
 would have to invest a large amount of
time
 surfing on the internet rather than for the sake of learning.
Moreover
,
further
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 reason is that periodically few citizens do not know the rules of
libraries
 which lead noise and disturbances for
another educators
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 as they increase the volume of their audio and video which may not fabulous for
older
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the older
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 generation but if they read
books
 on sitting one place they may
also
 know
role
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 of discipline and
time
 impotence despite
of
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having
legion
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 advantage of
technology
 individuals can read
books
 on
internet
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the internet
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 on any
time
 when they want but for
libraries
 they have to move another place .one server was conducted on
students
 study that ,learns can do their study with
best
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 way when they read out from
books
 because they have not any social
media
 in their surrounding which boast their opportunities of career life. In conclusion,
although
collection
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 of
books
 contribute
enormous
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 factors, if
students
 use
technology
 while studying they can do more focus on their education.
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