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It is important for all towns and cities to have large public spaces such as squares and parks. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#towns #cities #spaces #squares #parks
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People have different views about the open areas
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 as squares and parks play a vital role in towns and
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.
This
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 essay will shed some light on why I am on the same page with those who support
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this
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 statement. There are two reasons why it could be argued that public grounds should not be considered as the heart of the
cities
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. The prominent reason is that the number of people
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migrate
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 to
cities
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 increases remarkably due to overpopulation, so these metropolitans do not have available spaces to construct parks or squares. Hong Kong, where inhabitants even do not possess enough
places
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 for establishing accommodation, can be taken as an object lesson.
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, the national authorities should
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 the budget on other prospects
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 as healthcare, education and transportation systems
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 of open spaces.
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 the drawbacks of huge spaces are inevitable, their advantages are more significant.
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, public
places
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 are the ideal
places
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 for local citizens
improving
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 their well-being and lifting up their spirit. Particularly, residents tend to have
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a stroll
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 around these
places
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 to release stressful things after their hectic daily schedules, which can do wonder for them to recharge the battery.
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, the deterioration of air quality becomes an alarming trend in
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, so green regions
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 as parks are able to contribute to
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environmental protection by diminishing the
amount
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 of greenhouse gases.
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, squares
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 preserve
historical
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the historical
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 value that boosts the tourism industry through attracting visitors
flock
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 into
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 area annually. In conclusion, I personally support that public
places
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brings
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 more benefits for people and eco-systems that outweigh their demerits.
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