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Today, people in many countries can live and work anywhere they choose, because of improved communication technology and transport. Do the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh its disadvantages?

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Nowadays we may not only enjoy our talking or meeting through touching one button on a small screen whenever we are and wherever we are，but we
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 may enjoy our travelling with a variety of means of transport. There is no doubt that the new science and technology are bringing huge changes into our life.
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globalization,
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time and distance are no longer barriers to
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international trade and exchange like teleconferencing
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 of communication means and transport.
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, for education, all kinds of the teaching approaches
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 as distance learning allow teachers and students to work more efficiently and effectively.
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, for our daily life, people could live or work at any place they are willing to, even miles away from their hometown as they could be back home easily by bus, underground, private car, fairy, flight and so on and stay in touch with their family at any time by the means of communication equipment.
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, everything has a negative side. While we enjoy the
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 and luxury of our dwelling derived from the
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 of science and technology, we have to realize that some damages
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 human health and the living environment
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 have been occurred inevitably. As we
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, the
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 of the automobile industry has been intensified the consumption of
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natural resources and the pollution of the environment. Another notable problem is that people are becoming more and more over-dependent on using all types of digital devices. Some researches have shown that these kinds of products would generate
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new human illnesses and would have
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 negative effect on some abilities of human
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 problem solving without those products. Overall, everything has two sides, positive and negative.
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advanced science and technology give us
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 convenient and more comfortable life,
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 has a negative fallout. But in my view, the advantages of
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 should outweigh its disadvantages because
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 is the only meaning of the existence of mankind. The key point should be what we are going to minimize the risks
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 and take all outcome of
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 into consideration on the ground of the concept of sustainability.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
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