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Some people enjoy change, and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they do not change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Explain why?

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Mostly all
people
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 search for an interesting living
life
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 but some individuals tend to live
boring
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life
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. It is argued that some
people
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 prefer to
change
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 for new
experience
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, while others prefer to live uninteresting
life
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 without any
change
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.
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 essay will discuss both parts of living including my opinion supported by reasons. On the one side, some
people
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love
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 to
change
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 and
experience
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 new
things
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 in
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life
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 including all aspects.
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people
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feel
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 refreshed if they go for new
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.
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 sometimes trying new
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 considered
as
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expensive,
people
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 enjoy spending on
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 activities
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such
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as
traveling
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travelling
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 around the world. Our Human Resource
manager
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,
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 he quit his job just to travel around the world and he is sharing his
experience
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 and encouraging
people
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 to travel around the world. I
love
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 to try new
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 because
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 enhances my
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 in
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life
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 and in the way
which
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in which
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 I live.
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, I am a person who
admire
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to explore
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exploring
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 and always I switch very fast
,
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 since I feel bore from repeating the same
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 .
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, some
people
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don
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do
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 not prefer exploring new
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 and they are stick to their routines.
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people
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 even always will visit
same
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the same
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 places because they feel it means a lot
for
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 them. Some
people
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also
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change
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 their habits, they feel
weak
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the weak
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 person does .Obviously, there is no harm in visiting new places, and
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, they feel happy in doing these
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. My family
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 always visits London, almost
each
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 year;
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, I won’t spend
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 huge sums by visiting the same country. I firmly not included in
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 group , I usually fed up easily with repeated
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 and I prefer to visit each country each year , so I can learn new
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 and know about
different
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a different
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 culture. In conclusion, I feel there is a positive
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 between
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’s personality and their way of living. There is no good or bad living style that, some
love
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 to
change
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 and explore new ways of living and others
love
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 to keep doing the same
things
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. I prefer to learn new ways of living and always search for something new.
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