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Many museums and historic sites are mainly visited by tourists rather than by local residents. What are the causes of this? What can be done for museums and historic sites to attract more local visitors?

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The number of residents who visit local museums and historic sites
is
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 often lower than visitors. Multiple factors lead to
this
 situation and there are various approaches to tackle
this
 problem. One possible reason is that sometimes local
people
 have to pay the same admission fee as tourists. In fact, the ticket price of some tourist attractions can be quite expensive.
Although
 it is worthwhile for visitors because it is often a once-in-a-lifetime experience, dwellers of that city may feel unmotivated to spend
such
 a great amount of money on a regular basis. The
second
 reason for
this
 situation is that collections in cultural facilities always remain unchanged within a long period of time,
Therefore
, they tend to be less attractive to those local citizens who have been there before and
people
 may prefer to spend their time on other appealing activities. Government should provide more funds to museums and historic sites so that they can update their relics frequently. These funds can
also
 be used by the owners to organize more culture-related exhibitions and training programs. Meanwhile, organizers need to work closely with the local media, schools and communities to make sure that local
people
 are well-informed of these activities.
Therefore
 citizens can get the information via a number of approaches and
hence
 become more likely to pay a visit. Meanwhile, giving residents a discount for the ticket can
also
 be an effective way to attract them.
People
 will flock in as long as these activities cost less of their life budget but are still educational.
Last
 but not least, shuttle buses can be arranged by either owner of these sites or the government if these places are located on the outskirt of the city.
Although
 there are a few reasons that result in
this
 situation, we can surely come up with several methods to cope with it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tourists
  • historic sites
  • culture
  • heritage
  • taken for granted
  • marketing and promotion
  • advertising
  • entry fees
  • incentives
  • educational programs
  • Local Appreciation Days
  • interactive exhibitions
  • immersive experiences
  • social media campaigns
  • community engagement
  • sense of ownership
  • cultural heritage
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