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Some people support the development of agriculture like factory farming and scientific creation of fruits and vegetables while others oppose.discribe ur opinion.

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Advancements in agriculture continue to be controversial, with some individuals claiming factory farming and scientific creation of food beneficial whilst others against it. Both views have solid arguments which I will discuss in
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 essay along with my own opinion. On the one hand,people supporting the contemporary methods of farming
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 as factory farming and genetic modifications of fruits and vegetables believe that these ways have increased the agriculture yield by protecting crops and
animals
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 from the various environmental threats , ranging from change in temperature to air-borne diseases, as crops and
animals
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 are kept indoors and have in direct contact with
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 environment.
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, now one could produce any crop and rear any animal irrespective of their natural habitat , climatic conditions .
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 has made almost every item's availability in every corner of the world possible without importing from other countries.
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, individuals opposing
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 modern techniques argue that they have affected the food quality by adding harmful chemicals in them and
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 leading to health issues for their consumers.According to them, traditional agricultural methods are better,as they do not use any artificial material for nurturing crops and
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 , every time is purely dependent on the available natural resources.
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 group of people love to follow those old methods in order to have a healthy, pure and organic diet. To conclude, I believe agricultural developments are good as they have made us able to have food in extreme conditions
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, but these developed techniques should not be over-used as they ruin the quality content of plants as well as
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