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traditional ideas from older people about the way to live and behave are not helpful to young people and their futures. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Long-standing claims from senior
people
 about how to live and behave are not beneficial anymore for juveniles,
therefore
, young adults generally think better of giving their ears to older
people
’s counsels. I firmly believe that there is a defensible basis for
this
 argument
,
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 since the world, which oldsters had known, was altered so much and they are now struggling to catch new trends and concepts.
First
 and foremost, it’s obvious that young adults usually have more bravery in their spirits than adults,
consequently
, they tend to seek their passions enthusiastically even in tough positions. Much as
this
 fact occasionally leads them to be careless individuals, juveniles still evaluate challenging situations with an optimistic as well as an
open minded
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 approach in order to learn from their errors and commence a task again. Most of the older
people
 do not follow the latest trends of business models or lifestyles,
besides
 their actions and future plans are profoundly pertaining to their previous experiences and past beliefs,
thus
 they are not acting so willingly as youngsters to venture into a new project and adapt their lives to new lifestyle models. In most cases, it goes without saying that teens have gained more knowledge than many elderly
people
 these days, especially in the fields of technology and finance on the grounds that using the internet more effectively.
For instance
, my cousin had purchased bitcoin 7 years ago and
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 time my grandfather didn’t approve of his action, calling it “a waste of money”. To sum up, I personally opine that many traditional approaches of oldsters about life and future have become invalid anymore so that the advice they give younger
people
 are a far way from being profitable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Traditional values
  • Adaptation
  • Innovation
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Timeless values
  • Modern challenges
  • Competitive
  • Hard work
  • Perseverance
  • Compliance
  • Suppression of creativity
  • Individuality
  • Progressive thinking
  • Wisdom
  • Elders
  • Past mistakes
  • Foundation
  • Community
  • Technology
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