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Some people think that the qualities of a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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At present, an academic
degree
 is considered to be successful in
life
. Many
people
 believe opposite to it, they feel that
college
 or university does not give qualities in the institutes.
People
 gain quality through
life
 experiences. I partially agree with the provided statement.
To begin
 with, many students have interested in doing something else rather than gain bookish knowledge in
college
.
For instance
, some children are good dancer, singer and other artist quality in them, they
focus
 on their talent more than study and later in
life
 they become a more successful
person
 as compared to
degree
 holder student.
Moreover
, some young personalities drop out of
college
 just to
focus
 on their dreams.
For example
, Bill Gates is the founder of Microsoft. He is one of the richest
people
 in
life
. He quit
college
 and totally
focus
 on computer programming. He does not need any
college
degree
 to get knowledge for programming but of
course
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 he needs books to read.
Therefore
,
people
 interest, quality and dedication make them successful
person
. Many
people
 who get a
degree
 but not successful as much as they want in
life
. On the other side, there are some exceptional cases where
college
 study needed. Some youngster wants to join government department to make a career in there. They need university study to get hired in the government sectors.
For example
, In Indian Air Force, require graduation from the candidate who interested to become a fighter pilot, if any
person
 does not graduate
then
 he/she could not be eligible to enrol in that field. In conclusion, it depends on a
person
,
first
 their interest or choice is matter. According to that, they
focus
 on their track.
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