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Some people think that exercise is the key to health while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Nowadays many
people
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, especially all ages and gender, important to consider how to live a healthy lifestyle every day. Being any painless living has many opportunities
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 as doing physical workout and a balanced diet. The two sides of the issue will be analyzed before a conclusion, quite reasonable, is found. A growing number of
people
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 feel that physical activity prevents various types of illnesses and it provides immunity.
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, researchers believed that a physical workout lowers the risks of developing heart trouble or diabetes. In recent years, inasmuch increased obesity due to lack of movement, heart attack and diabetes are a lot of
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’s main problem. Some
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 might not have a lot of time doing exercise and cannot afford to go to the gym.
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, many
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 who are interested in losing weight and want to have a healthy body diet in a balanced meal. Sometimes the meal, which we eat every day, does not provide appropriate nutrition. Nutritional deficiency can lead to a host of ailments
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 as anaemia, goitre and brittle bones. Because in some cases, we are overweight and nutritionally deficient.
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, children nowadays usually eat fast food, which is the cause of child obesity, A and D vitamin deficiency.
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 should agree on their lifestyle and physical features and a balanced diet. In conclusion, there are many healthy ways of life suitable for every person. Anyway, the important thing is
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 don't have any diseases in their simple lifestyle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cardiovascular health
  • Metabolism
  • Chronic diseases
  • Immune system
  • Mental well-being
  • Nutrients
  • Malnutrition
  • Obesity
  • Type 2 diabetes
  • Circulation
  • Nutrient distribution
  • Preventive health
  • Energy levels
  • Balanced diet
  • Essential nutrients
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