Some people think that sports play an important role in society. Others think they are nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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maintain
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children physical as well as mental health sports play important role in their life. Because outdoor recreation is nothing but , the part of
exercise
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the exercise
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.
Equally
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it is beneficial for
community
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the community
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. But, some people claim that
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it is no more than free time activity. In my opinion, I think, playing games
that
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increases a student strength and
proud
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pride
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of
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in
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their
society
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.
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with,
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sport
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sports
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play as helpful or leisure is depend upon people thinking some play
sport
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in their free time for
stress free
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feelings
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, some students are passionate about their
sport
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.
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, in
India
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everyone
play
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a
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cricket because they are interested and play as
a
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entertainment.
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, they make
team
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a team
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and play
as
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on
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their personal level. And not focused
about
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on
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world
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the world
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cup etc.
Secondly
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, take part in outdoor games is beneficial for
teenager
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teenagers
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health. It helps to grow children as much as fast.
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, they should improve their body muscles,
stress free
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mind
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as well as they are hungry to eat food.
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, in covid-19 lockdown students are not allowed to go outside for playing with their friends that’s the reason they are angry and irritated
also
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.
Thirdly
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,
student
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students
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play
sport
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is
proud
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a proud
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feel
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for
society
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, playing
sport
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as a champion it gives some different kind of medals for
society
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. Equally, it is
entertainment
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an entertainment
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part for nearby people.
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, Mahendra
singh
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Singh
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Dhoni is
good
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a good
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example
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because some children want to become like him. And he got
trophy
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a trophy
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towards our nation.
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example
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, Sania Mirza
she
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apply
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is famous for Tennis
sport
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. She is serious about her
sport
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. And it is beneficial for both
nation
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nations
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as well as herself. She got six grand slam
title
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titles
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. So, it is
proud
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a proud
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for
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of
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society
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.
Lastly
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, I conclude that
,
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playing
sport
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as a passion is helpful
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for
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foe
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for
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society
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and personal development. So,
sport
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is important and leisure is
depend
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dependent
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on human thinking.
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