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Students today get information online, so libraries are not necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#students #information #libraries
It is sometimes argued that
,
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 about the role of the
library
 at
this
 moment because
students
 get their study materials from online. While I disagree with the idea of stoping
library
system
 from
education
System
. There are several reasons why the
library
 is important.
First
 of all, traditionally
library
 is a great source of knowledge because the
library
 is the only place where all types of
books
 sorted by categories. Generally, In every
library
, the authority collected
books
 from
any
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 sources, especially they consist old and new
both
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types of
books
. Almost all educational institutes
has
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 a central
library
.
Students
 do their research by different kinds of
books
,and
also
 did their group study on there. They prefer the
library
 because many writers book available
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there.So the
library
 is very essential for
students
.
Besides
 government and private
service
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also
 built a
library
 for common
people
. Children to adults all types of
people
 love to spend time in the
library
. it is really beneficial for normal
people
.
Also
, some
people
 are worked at the
library
 as
a permanent employees
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.
On the other hand
, nowadays the
internet
 plays a vital role in
education
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system
. All kinds of resources and theory available on the
internet
.
For example
, when any
students
 need any information or data they prefer to collect information from the
internet
. Pupils can get
a free pdf versions
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a free pdf version
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 of any book on the
internet
. It is true that
,
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 the
internet
 is very helpful for
students
. But most of them do not use it properly.Sometimes, School going
students
 play games or videos on devices. Which is not good. So paper-based
information
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 always safe for them. The
library
 is a key part of the
education
system
.
That is
 why
,
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 we can not think about our
education
 without a
library
. In conclusion, the
internet
 is important for
students
 at the same time
library
.I believe without
library
students
 can not think
their
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study
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studies
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. So it is necessary.
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