The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Accidents are one of the causes of depopulation in developing
countires
. It is thought that giving stringent Correct your spelling
countries
punishments
to offenders would reduce accidents. In my opinion, I completely agree with that thought, because people
commit mistakes as they are taking things as
granted.
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for
Firstly
, most of the accidents are happening because of negligence while driving. Particulary
, in the developing countries, Correct your spelling
Particularly
people
does
not obey the traffic rules as there are not Change the verb form
do
much
strict Change the quantifier
many
punishments
for disobeying driving rules. Unlike developed countries, where they have technologies in place to identify persons breaking the traffic laws
. For example
, many advanced economic countires
have Correct your spelling
countries
AI based
camera at signals to capture photographs of cars that Add a hyphen
AI-based
violates
red signal and they would be punished at Change the verb form
violate
later
point with the evidence captured. Add an article
a later
However
, to implement these technologies in developing and under developing
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under-developing
countires
would be a huge problem as it Correct your spelling
countries
inccur
massive costs.
Correct your spelling
incur
Secondly
, this
is all about people
mindset. For example
, many countires
have Correct your spelling
countries
high
degree of Add an article
a high
punishments
for serious crimes and people
will not dare to commit those crimes. Whereas, when it comes to driving offenses
, it is not taken so seriously and Change the spelling
offences
also
the penalty charges imposed are also
very low. Hence
, people
will not take these laws
very seriously. On the other hand
, creating awareness by including traffic/driving laws
in school subjects and campaign the effects of breaking laws
would help but thats
for the longer term as it would take time to see the results.
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that's
that
Finally
, in my opinion, relatively harsh punishments
and more fines are required to bring down the
driving Correct article usage
apply
offenses
so that Change the spelling
offences
people
take these laws
more seriously and adopt it
. BecauseCorrect pronoun usage
them
,
it does not affect only the individual who Remove the comma
apply
disobey
but Change the verb form
disobeys
also
others on roads
.Correct article usage
the roads
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