The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Accidents are one of the causes of depopulation in developing
countires
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countries
. It is thought that giving stringent
punishments
to offenders would reduce accidents. In my opinion, I completely agree with that thought, because
people
commit mistakes as they are taking things
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granted.
Firstly
, most of the accidents are happening because of negligence while driving.
Particulary
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Particularly
, in the developing countries,
people
does
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not obey the traffic rules as there are not
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strict
punishments
for disobeying driving rules. Unlike developed countries, where they have technologies in place to identify persons breaking the traffic
laws
.
For example
, many advanced economic
countires
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countries
have
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camera at signals to capture photographs of cars that
violates
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red signal and they would be punished at
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point with the evidence captured.
However
, to implement these technologies in developing and
under developing
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countires
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countries
would be a huge problem as it
inccur
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incur
massive costs.
Secondly
,
this
is all about
people
mindset.
For example
, many
countires
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countries
have
high
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degree of
punishments
for serious crimes and
people
will not dare to commit those crimes. Whereas, when it comes to driving
offenses
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, it is not taken so seriously and
also
the penalty charges imposed are
also
very low.
Hence
,
people
will not take these
laws
very seriously.
On the other hand
, creating awareness by including traffic/driving
laws
in school subjects and campaign the effects of breaking
laws
would help but
thats
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that's
that
for the longer term as it would take time to see the results.
Finally
, in my opinion, relatively harsh
punishments
and more fines are required to bring down
the
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driving
offenses
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so that
people
take these
laws
more seriously and adopt
it
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. Because
,
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it does not affect only the individual who
disobey
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but
also
others on
roads
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the roads
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.
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