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The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#road #safety #punishments #offenses
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Accidents are one of the causes of depopulation in developing
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countires
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countries
. It is thought that giving stringent
punishments
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 to offenders would reduce accidents. In my opinion, I completely agree with that thought, because
people
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 commit mistakes as they are taking things
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 granted.
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, most of the accidents are happening because of negligence while driving.
Particulary
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, in the developing countries,
people
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 not obey the traffic rules as there are not
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 strict
punishments
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 for disobeying driving rules. Unlike developed countries, where they have technologies in place to identify persons breaking the traffic
laws
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.
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, many advanced economic
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countires
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countries
 have
AI based
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 camera at signals to capture photographs of cars that
violates
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 red signal and they would be punished at
later
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 point with the evidence captured.
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, to implement these technologies in developing and
under developing
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countires
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countries
 would be a huge problem as it
inccur
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incur
 massive costs.
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,
this
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 is all about
people
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 mindset.
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, many
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countires
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countries
 have
high
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 degree of
punishments
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 for serious crimes and
people
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 will not dare to commit those crimes. Whereas, when it comes to driving
offenses
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, it is not taken so seriously and
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 the penalty charges imposed are
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 very low.
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,
people
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 will not take these
laws
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 very seriously.
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, creating awareness by including traffic/driving
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 in school subjects and campaign the effects of breaking
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 would help but
thats
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that's
that
 for the longer term as it would take time to see the results.
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, in my opinion, relatively harsh
punishments
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 and more fines are required to bring down
the
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driving
offenses
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 so that
people
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 take these
laws
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 more seriously and adopt
it
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them
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. Because
,
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 it does not affect only the individual who
disobey
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 but
also
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 others on
roads
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the roads
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