Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure center that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council. In your letter: •give details of how you and your friends or family use the center •explain why the sports leisure center is important for the local community •describe the possible effects on local people if the center closes

Dear Sir or Madam, I'm writing
you
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the
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sports and leisure
center
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that you run. I've recently received a notice that it is planned to be shut down
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. I believe
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will be a loss for the whole community. Two times a week,
me
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and my close friend visit the local gym at the
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.
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Sunday my wife takes our children to the swimming pool
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inside
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the main compound. Each time, we see dozens of other people who come
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for the sporting activities or just to enjoy the regular performances of local music bands. It's a popular place for the folk and has always been important for the community. I believe closing the
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will force many to quit sports and young musicians will have
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opportunities to present their work to the public. I really urge you to find other ways to continue funding
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. Yours truly, Alexander Federyakov
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly focuses on a single main idea. This helps in keeping your arguments impactful and easy to follow.
Accuracy
Check for and correct any minor grammatical errors and typographical mistakes to enhance clarity and professionalism in the letter.
Task Achievement
Consider expanding on your points with more detailed examples or personal stories to strengthen your argument against the closure.
Task Achievement
The letter effectively communicates personal concern and the center's community value, aligning well with the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
The logical structure of the letter, with each paragraph dedicated to a specific point, aids in the overall coherence and cohesion of the text.
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