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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that sharing the
information
 for free as much as possible in many types of
research
such
 as scientific, business and education
research
 is a good way, while some
people
 claim it is too necessary and too priceless to share the
information
 freely.
This
 essay will argue these points of view. On the
one
 hand,
information
 is a thing that
people
 use in order to study in their works or their
research
. If
people
 can
access
 the
information
 freely, they will be able to know the
information
 which is updated all the time. In certain
research
, the
research
 obtained can be applied to the
research
 which is being studied.
For example
, market researchers have to
access
 a large amount of business
research
 before they can create a new strategy.
Moreover
, many scientists doing new
research
also
 have to
access
 the
research
 which is related in order to publish a better
one
 or an updated
one
.
On the other hand
, sharing
information
 for free is not fair for some
people
.
This
 is because doing
research
 or discovering a new thing are works for researchers. They publish the
information
 in order to earn money.
For instance
, before doing some
research
 from researchers, some of them have to pay money to
access
 the
information
 which is related
information
.
This
 can lead to difficult data acquisition
as a result
 for some
people
 do not pay money once, but they have to pay more than
one
 time to finish their work. It is clear that sharing
information
 is too valuable to be shared freely. All in all, both these points of view are important for individuals. In my opinion, I believe that both of these perspectives are important to many
people
 gaining specific details.
People
 are supposed to
access
 freely due to the use of
information
 in their work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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