These days Internet-based courses have become a popular alternative to university-based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Nowadays the classrooms
also
transforming to
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digitalization, where
students
no longer need to attend
lectures
in their classroom, what is
neccessary
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necessary
is their either PC, laptop or
smarphone
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smartphone
. But, a question still arises that whether completing their academics is
worthfull
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worthful
worth full
by attending whole
lectures
in the
university
or can achieve through the internet-based courses. After the outbreak of the pandemic, all academic institutions are
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due to the enforcement of a lockdown by the government, where
students
are forced to complete their remaining studies by attending
lectures
through webinars
such
as Zoom, where lecturers are able to provide their
lectures
through video
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conferencing
, due to
this
reason, a number of universities begin to offer
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range of internet-based courses, where a large scale of
students
start
prefering
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preferring
because of
easy
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accessible
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, no need to travel to accomplish degrees by leaving their hometown, reasonable rates, achieve multiple degrees
simuntaneously
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simultaneously
and can attend
classes
anywhere.
However
, attending
classes
in-person within the
university
is more preferable in
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of when a person attend and have his
lectures
in the
university
, at that time he gets ample
oppurtunity
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opportunity
to make camaraderies, able to have great communication with them,
moreover
, student able to study properly in-classroom due to the arena and able to communicate, ask doubts and able to meet professors personally, whereas overall is not possible in webinar
classes
. In the case of the online
classes
, a range of
students
fail to have proper
concenteration
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concentration
and often diverted by Gmails and social media chats, there is no restrictions or rules what they have to abide
in
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the universities,
also
, the wrong advantages are taken by the bunkers,
although
they will definitely join webinars,
but
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they will be doing something else,
for instance
, sleeping and talking with their friends on phone or doing other activities.
Additionally
, the practical
classes
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not possible because
students
cannot afford the equipment or keep things
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home
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,
such
as the machines for the engineer
students
. In conclusion,
students
should prefer to study in the
university
and attend their
lectures
in-person as they will remain in principle and even able to gain friends, while in online
classes
, you could hardly able to make friends as
their
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are
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no freedom to talk or share their views, henceforth, no productivity, but it is utilizing only in the case of emergency like in the case of
pandemic
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for compensating the loss of studies that are left.
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