Some people think that radio has become out-of-date and there is no need to listen to the radio for the entertainment and news. Do you agree or disagree?

Playing the
radio
was an entertaining and educational activity to broaden one's ideas with respect to music and improve the knowledge about
the
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recent events.But, as I made
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statement what is vital is the past tense used.
This
means I disagree considering the
radio
to be important nowadays.
Although
we feel that we should not walk away from what has been taught to us by our elders, I feel walking with the time and learning what the new era has to teach us is equally important.So here I feel listening to the
radio
is now a bit outdated. There are various other ways to gather the news and enjoy the
entartainment
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entertainment
in the world
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for example
watching the TV, listening to a voice automated hearing device which is internet enabled and needs no hand
fuction
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function
or even reading the news on a phone or a tablet.In any of the above
devices
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we not only enjoy the entertainment without manually scrolling much avoiding the advertisements and even can browse through the sections without reading them in detail, especially the ones where we don't want to know in detail about.
On the other hand
, listening to the
radio
has been a soothing
way
of enjoying music and the most stereotypical
way
to learn about what's happening in the world for many, like our parents and grandparents. From 1950 to 1980, especially in
India
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there were no televisions or cellphones or any other
way
except for a newspaper to know the about the daily and worldwide news headings. During those times, life was hard and yes, the
radio
was a
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discovery. There would the birds chirping and the
radio
paying simultaneously from the
neighborhood
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kitchen's as the stay-at-home mother would make breakfast for her family as it was a trend for women in India to
reamin
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remain
as housewives.
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time their only source of entertainment was listening to
radio
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and humming the music.
This
would bring a smile to their faces and make them do their daily chores in a cheerful
way
. The
radio
would
also
help the roadside vendors and tea stalls engrossed in their work
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but in a healthy and jovial manner. To conclude, I would say that as a person born after the advent of the television, watching my mother and father listen to
radio
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and me getting annoyed at its shrill noise at times to the point in my life where I could afford a walkman, later an iPod, a laptop and now I have a television with a fire stick device which is voice automated, I feel that the interest in listening to the
radio
is fading off. Walking with the times is as equally important as holding on to your past.But, I do prefer the former.
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