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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believethat they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Some say that university students should not be forced to choose academic
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 in high-level education,
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 others argue that they should take
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 that are useful for their futures.
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 essay will argue that
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 pursuing a degree in science and technology gives more career opportunities, taking a major in what students like gives them a sense of satisfaction. On the one hand, it is true that graduating in science-related
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, information technology, and engineering opens prestigious job titles with high wages.
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, it provides more job opportunities.
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, companies like Microsoft and Google search for highly qualified employees to join their companies, they pay high amounts of salary to workers.
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, it may lead to competition between the applicants, which may lead to less access to jobs. Increasing competition among applicants may result in fewer job positions, optimally leading to an increase in unemployment.
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, despite having high-paying jobs, workers may not be satisfied with their workplace.
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 is because, if the company pays a good amount of money for their work, it comes with great responsibilities. A person failing to maintain a work-life balance may lead to some physical and mental illnesses.
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, research done in a company, Daraz, shows that 5 out of 10 employees are not satisfied with their jobs.
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, no one should be forced to do anything. They should be left free; pursuing one's interests shows good outcomes. In conclusion, graduating in highly popular
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 may give high career opportunities, but that would not give a person a sense of fulfilment or satisfaction.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that outlines its main idea. This will help guide the reader and improve the logical structure of your essay.
task achievement
Expand on the examples provided in your essay. While you give relevant instances, more detailed explanations or additional examples would strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Consider balancing your paragraphs more effectively. The first body paragraph focuses heavily on job opportunities, while the second addresses job satisfaction. Try to allocate similar weight to both views in your discussion.
structure
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which is essential for coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
You present both sides of the argument, which effectively addresses the essay prompt and demonstrates critical thinking.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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