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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Parents
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 are the
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 teachers of the
children
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. Group of people argues that it is the schools that are responsible to teach
children
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 good etiquettes of a social being whereas other people think it is the duty of the
parents
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 to make
children
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 a decent pupil of community. I will be discussing both views, related to
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 and concluding with my opinion while illustrating some of the examples from personal experience. On the one hand,
children
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first
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 get to know their
parents
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 after getting into the world. The majority of kids follow the same pattern observing their father or mother. At a young age, they are quick learners and tend to imitate what they see around them, in regard to
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, it is the duty of the
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 to act appropriately if they expect their
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 to be acceptable members of society.
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,
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 do what they see rather than what is asked them to do by just commanding.
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, my brother from a young age observes my father quite keenly and follows the same routine as him like waking up early, going for a morning walk, etc.
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, youngers believe schools as the learning place.
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 perception already in their mind helps them to practice immediately in their routine life.
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, good friends at
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 really help them to be well mannered whereas bad companies at
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 will definitely have a negative influence. Students see teachers as their mentors and do have a great impact in moulding child's behaviour and assist them to be responsible citizens of society. To recapitulate, both dwelling and
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 are the learning places, albeit, according to me, home is the
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 institution for the young ones.
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, before even entering
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 it is the responsibility of
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 to teach them the positives and negatives and behave in the same manner as they want to see their offspring. Mother father inspire their kids and
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 serve as role models for many.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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