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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, the problem of how to
balance
gender
 differences in subject selection in university has provoked a vigorous discussion. Some sections of society shed that universities should remain sexual equal and keep the enrolment of students the same number in each subject, while I do not agree about
this
 argument due to the following reasons.
Firstly
, recruiting equal
gender
 sounded fair and reasonable in
education
 as well as avoiding any
gender
 discrimination is a real
balance
-lose. Actually, to choose the interesting
subjects
 and good suitable
quality
 of candidate rather than focusing on the same number of male and female are the real objective.
In other words
, the
education
 ‘s aim is to provide equal opportunities to the students who love these
subjects
 and who have the potential ability to study them well.
For example
, if some
subjects
 only consider
gender
 equality but refuse the candidate who really has interesting in
this
 subject is ultimately derail the original goal of
education
 and
also
 miss the good
quality
 of faculties.
Furthermore
, carry out restrictions to ask the
balance
 of male and female students will cause them
further
 problems. As a fast-paced society, it is normal to see the job requirement level becoming higher than before and the living costing
also
 increasing more than in the past. In order to get a battered job and keep a high
quality
 of lifestyle, more people will compete with the hot
subjects
. If the major in college only set the
gender
balance
 as a requirement but not the
quality
 of these
subjects
 would obviously unfair to those who have the ability to learn well in
this
 major because of their
gender
 limits. The candidate number occupied by the person who only fit with their
gender
 requirement is quite unfair. In conclusion,
education
 is to provide them equal opportunities to those opponents to acquire knowledge rather than to compulsory
balance
gender
 which has already betray the original goal of
education
. So as the reason above entirely expresses my disagreement about
this
 topic.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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