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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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It is true that in
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 modern era,
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 has changed the way
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 communicate with each other.
Technology
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 has affected in various ways especially the relationship with other
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.
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, I believe that
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 has developed a positive impact
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people
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. One of the good development that
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 made is
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 are able to interact with each other without meeting them.
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,
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 who do business with clients who lives in a different country can communicate with each other via
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. Cooperation between
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 in different countries was much more difficult when communication just only limited to letter;
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, nowadays
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 can communicate with each other by email, video call and phone call. All of these are almost good as the same as face-to-face. Other than that, most
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 use social
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 to share common interests and interact with each other. Social
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 like Facebook and Instagram can be used to keep communicate with families and friends and can
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 get to know
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 around the world and be friends with them on social
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.
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, many
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 prefer to spend most of their
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 on social
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 other than meet
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 to communicate in person and having a good quality
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 together.
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, these
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 will lack communication skills in real life and tend to be isolated themselves when having a family gathering.
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, many children play games on mobile phones or laptops for a long
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, which is can lead to health problems.
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, these children will need a pair of glasses because they spend a lot of
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 on laptops or mobile phones that made their vision become unclear. Other than that,
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 who spend most of their
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 on
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 will waste a lot of their precious
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. Due to
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, they will end up finish the day without doing anything
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 of learning something new. In conclusion, I support that the advances of
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 have a lot of good development.
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 need to control themselves when using
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 so that they do not use it in the wrong ways.

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  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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