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Band 8

You are looking for part-time employment. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: • give details about your professional experience and qualifications • explain what type of work you are looking for • say how they can contact you and when you would be available to start work.

I am writing to apply for one of the part-time jobs advertised by your company in King's newspaper yesterday. I am an IT professional with over 17 years of work experience in different IT domains. Inclusive in my years of experience, I have been working for 10 years as an Application Engineer with additional experience in areas like business analysis, database management, networking, software implementation, testing, and health check/monitoring tools.
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, I have a BSc in Computer Science from Manchester State University. Interestingly, the Support role task advertised is exactly similar to the task I performed in my previous job. I would be a good fit for the job,
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, I can still fit other roles advertised like System Analyst, and Business Analyst; but my first option would be Application Support, others would just be options in case I am not able to get the initial option. I can be reached on my mobile at 55500999 or by email at [email protected]. I am
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 available to start immediately Thanks for going through my letter. I anticipate your positive feedback and possible discussion in an interview. Yours Sincerely, Frank

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using paragraph breaks for clarity, making it easier for the reader to follow your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to enhance the clarity of your letter.
task achievement
The letter demonstrates a clear structure and presents relevant professional experience effectively.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, which is appropriate for a job application.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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