People will buy a product if it has quality or fulfill their needs. There is no need for advertisement and considered as a form of entertainment. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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Nowadays, advertising is
one
of the essential parts
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marketing. Many
people
believe that if the
product
meets the standards
people
will buy it regardless
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as it a form of amusement. I
am completely disagree
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with the above statement.
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conclusion in
following
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paragraphs. Awareness about
products
is
invetible
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invertible
investible
inevitable
aspects when
people
going to buy it. In
this
competition
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world ,
one
can get
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amount of
products
to buy a single item.
Hence
one
tends to compare the
product
features like safety, reliability, exclusive features.
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makes
people
aware
about
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all the features and helps them to decide what should buy.
For instance
, according to a survey conducted by
sales
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department of Nestle,
products
which are advertised had
a
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20% more sales
compare
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to
similar
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a similar
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product
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products
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that
were
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not advertised in
year
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2020.
Therefore
, it is necessary to make
people
aware
about
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it. Another major thing is, endorsements
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positive effects on
one
's mental state. By
quotting
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quoting
quitting
this
point
i
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mean that
,
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through
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people
could come to see it repeatedly so that
product
will
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he
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be
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in their memory. If anytime they need to buy same
products
, the
first
thing
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in
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mind is about
advertisement
and
people
tend to buy that more. To
examplify
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exemplify
this
, 35% of buyers have accepted that at least
ones
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in a lifetime they
have
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buy a
product
because of
advertisement
according to a survey of
Psyck
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Psych
Department, Africa. It can be clearly seen that it has psychological effects. To
conculde
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conclude
,
this
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selling of the
products
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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