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Some people say that E book and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspapers and magazines. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #e #book #technology #newspapers #magazines
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 few decades, a robust increment of the online study material
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is why few individuals contend that online literature will be
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 option for readers in the near future. I
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believe
 that the pace of change depicts that it is quite possible and there are multiple reasons for
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 development.
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 with, there are a few benefits of reading from
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books
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. Some
people
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 are not comfortable with technology and they become upset by studying from various technical gadgets.
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, the elderly
people
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 who spend their whole life reading from paper
books
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 and it is extremely hard for them to switch the pattern of reading at
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 age.
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, traditional
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and magazines don't cause any stress on the eyes of
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the reader
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reader
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readers
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, whereas
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e-books
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books
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 have many harmful impacts on the vision of readers
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 as refractive errors.
On the contrary
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, there are enormous benefits of online
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.
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 and foremost,
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e-books
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books
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 are the most
cost effective
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, as
people
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 just need
the
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 internet connection and a subscription
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e library
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e-library
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.
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, the monthly package of Google library which is available online is cheaper than one newspaper or
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magazine
again
.
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, ebooks don't need any physical facilities to store them and
people
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 can carry an abundance amount of
books
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 in their smart
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phones
.
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, they are not damaged by any physical disaster
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 as rain, storm and fire. In conclusion, I think that even though
people
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 would face difficulties
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with
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 ebooks, the future belongs to
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modility
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modality
mobility
 because it is the least expensive and most convenient way to seek knowledge. It is the need of the hour to familiarized the elderly citizens with
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 state-or-the-art opportunity.
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