In many parts of the world there is continuous coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourage the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

Whether live
sports
on television change youngsters from actually playing
sports
in real life is a controversial issue. In my opinion,
TV
sports
live strongly encourage young
people
join
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sports
.
This
essay will discuss the benefits of media and the effects
from
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famous athletes. Beyond all question,
TV
sports
live has some benefits for young
people
and the most important one is that provide a chance for them to have an access of
sports
which they never experience before . Many
sports
channels broadcast non-stop sporting competitions and young
people
are more likely to
try
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play outdoor games when they
are interest
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are interested
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in
a
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apply
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certain
sports
that are played on
TV
. Because
youngests
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youngest
will lack
of
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interests
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interest
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on
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in
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sports
if they do not understand how these games actually play.
For example
,the number of baseball players in Guiyang increased from 500 to 1670
people
during these 2 years. Compare with teenagers in 2010,them become a big fan of baseball due to the new
sports
lives on
TV
. So that,Non-stop
sports
on
TV
in a way encourage youngsters from becoming sportsmen themselves.       
In
addition
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sport
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sports
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stars may become a brand new reason that young
people
play
sports
in
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apply
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outside
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the outside
an outside
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area. They might be attracted by
sports
celebrities’ fantastic life, excellent capacity or something else. So that,they might set these famous athletes as
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a goal
the goal
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goal
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goals
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to achieve and do
sports
oftenly
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often
to become
a good athletes
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a good athlete
good athletes
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as their
idol
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idols
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.
For instance
,Jordan is the idol of a little boy and his dream is
become
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a famous basketball player
as
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Jordan.
Finally
this
little boy
join
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joins
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the NBA and is
know
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known
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as Black Mamba. His name is Kobe,the famous
basktball
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basketball
player in the hall of fame.
This
example
emphasize
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the importance of the force of a role model for young
people
. To conclude, Sport lives on
TV
provide a channel for young
people
know
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to know
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more about
sports
and these
sport
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sports
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stars become a motivation for young
people
to do
sports
. I strongly believe that it
encourage
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encourages
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young
people
to do
sports
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