In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impacts of ageing populations.

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century, medical and hospital undergrowing significant growth in order to save
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society is facing. In
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is facing is an increase in
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constant rise in
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impacts directly on
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sector, which causes that
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is impacting the number of
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more and more nowadays, causing
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. From the research of several scientific universities, the data collected from
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is very problematic in most of the
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the maximum age for the people to work in
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medical and hospital facility, which will not impact
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others facilities.
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there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences to
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can be anticipated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • ageing population
  • healthcare system
  • pension system
  • economic productivity
  • labor force
  • elderly care
  • caregiving services
  • social isolation
  • preventive healthcare
  • community support
  • workforce demographic
  • financial sustainability
  • healthcare innovation
  • family-friendly policies
  • remote work options
  • flexible working hours
  • mental well-being
  • population demographics
  • retirement age
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