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Some people believe that all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent machines. What is your opinion?

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Artificial intelligence is believed to take over most of the
jobs
 done by humans in the future.
While
 most unskilled
jobs
 will eventually be taken over by
robots
, replacing humans in the
jobs
 that require human contact is unlikely.
This
 essay will discuss why eventually only a handful of
jobs
 will be carried out by people.
Robots
 may replace humans only in specific
jobs
 where human skills are not required. Many companies are replacing people with artificially intelligent devices which are cost-effective as compared to hiring and training staff to carry out easy tasks.
Moreover
, these
robots
 perform these
jobs
 with more precision and productively which will eradicate the challenge of human error and the time taken to complete a job. To cite an example, supermarkets have replaced cashiers and stock checkers with bots which
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 way
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 than employees.
Furthermore
, these bots can work
round
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 the clock and do not need any days off. For these reasons,
jobs
 that do not require human involvement will be replaced by artificially intelligent
robots
.
Conversely
,
robots
 will not be able to replace
jobs
 that require a human touch. The human capacity to perform certain
jobs
 is much more than
machines
 and
robots
 will never be able to achieve that capacity. Some examples of these specific tasks are massage, education, health and social work.
For example
,
machines
 can not replace doctors as it is impossible for
machines
 to carry out an operation. These tasks
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can be carried out by specialists with high skills and can not be matched by bots.
To conclude
,
while
 some people agree that human employees will be replaced by
machines
, others believe that they will not be able to replace certain skills. In my opinion, artificially intelligent
machines
 are capable
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 human workers to a large extent but it is impossible to match the human capacity to perform
high skill
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jobs
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificially intelligent machines
  • Automate
  • Job displacement
  • Creative thinking
  • Human intuition
  • Ethical considerations
  • Human touch
  • Economic impact
  • Workforce
  • AI management
  • Collaboration
  • Data processing
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Adaptability
  • Unpredictability
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