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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

#scientists #tourists #travel #environment #pole #development
As a
matter
 of fact, technology and knowledge have been developing so scholars and overseas
people
 can trip to distant places as a pattern the South Pole, North Pole and so on. I am of the opinion that there are some advantages and disadvantages to
this
matter
.
Firstly
, to start with the advantages. My own view on
this
matter
,
this
 situation is able to help to enlarge
people
's worldwide. In
this
 day and age a person can find out various some data from the Internet, websites, a social media, others what he or she dreams to watch ou
nevertheless
 ,in fact, the sightseeing look at alive better than to see in the book,in the blog and so on. Briefly,
this
 condition gives a chance to enlarge your worldwide, comments, notions and so on. Probably,
people
 learn that the
defense
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 of the environment is crucial for the future. Another factor scientists can enforce to explore more exact in the condition
,
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apply
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 because they will watch out themselves. It seems to me that their's chance will increase to discover the methods for different aims ,
for example
, to abolish or decrease pollution, to fall extra hot and so on.
Secondly
, maybe there are some negative points. Because both tourists and scholars' life will become in the danger. They will feel all hazardous exactly and the hardships will live absolutely than before time. Maybe,
this
 will create disasters in
people
 about getting cool feet.
In addition
, more
people
 don't know how they had better use of safe dresses, how they have to act and so on. To sum up, I believe that each person shouldn't visit there. As there is some danger and they don't know about
this
matter
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  • remote natural environment
  • scientific research
  • climate change
  • environmental preservation
  • economic benefits
  • conservation efforts
  • habitat disruption
  • pollution
  • cultural disruption
  • indigenous populations
  • commercialization
  • safety risks
  • personal enrichment
  • ecosystems
  • awareness
  • appreciation for nature
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