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It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Education is the foundation of everything in
life
. No school no growth is a slogan
that is
 basically strong enough by itself. Nowadays most the
students
 live apart from family to get their education for a bright future.Some people believe that
students
 should stay apart from family while having college
life
 while I think it is not bad if
students
 stay with their
parents
 during their study. 
First
 of all,
parents
 are the
first
 teachers of any child, they understand their children better than anyone else does so in
this
 case if
students
 are having any kind of issue
then
 they can discuss openly with their
parents
 without any hesitation and any fear.
For instance
, these days suicide rate of
students
 who are abroad is getting increased day by day because they have no one to discuss their mental health so youth should be with their
parents
 while they cross
this
 age of time.
On the other hand
, some people argue that be independent is the best feeling in the world so if pupils are far away from their
parents
 so they are more concentrated on their studies and work because they know they are all responsible for themselves and
students
 love to have an independent
life
.
Furthermore
 , for ,example there is one research done by Americans that
students
 who are apart from their
parents
 are more focused and attentive for education and future. Overall, it can be seen that family is always attentive and careful so they should be with their children while in college
life
 or studying.
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