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Some people say that traveling abroad is necessary to get knowledge about other countries, while others suggest that TV and the internet can also help people know about foreign countries. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many
people
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 have visited the
countries
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 whatever they like. It is considered by many that
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 is a necessary part of getting information about
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.
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, others think that digital
media
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 is enough for
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. I think, travelling is a much more effective way to learn about their cultures and history,
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 the internet represents some facilities. On the one hand, travelling abroad opens up more opportunities so
people
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 can travel freely, resulting in elaborate exploration of cultures, historical places or traditional food restaurants.
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, tourists might taste snacks not experienced in digital platforms in an unpopular restaurant.
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 to that, by travelling
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 have a chance to get to know inhabitants living in different
countries
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 so they obtain ideas about there.
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, modern
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 have no time to travel to every country.
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, digital sources enable us to travel to almost each of
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 and learn about traditional foods and beverages or lifestyles.
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, TV programs can introduce us to important areas or parts of
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.
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, some parts of
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 are not accessible for tourists in reality because of being tough to reach or hazard for their life, leading to the digital
media
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 becomes important.
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, documentaries, whether to be in Tv or on the internet, make facilities when we consider how dangerous Amazon tribes and North Korea are. In my opinion, knowledge is gained through experience. Even if some programs in digital
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 go around the world,
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 remains artificial.
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, travelling provides us with the sensation of the country’s historic texture and connection with foreign nations. In conclusion, travelling given opportunities for tasting foods or communicating with inhabitants.
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, visiting some areas in the world is risky or impossible with own facilities and digital
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 especially documentary reach us all parts of globe detailly.
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