A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. HelShe has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holliday Describe some possible disadvantages Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Misha Hope you are doing well. I am happy to hear that you are going on

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holiday and thank you for taking my advice. First of all, I believe that you will totally enjoy it

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because I know that you are going through a rough time and you are feeling so depressed, so going on a holiday is the best way to forget about your problems. But there are some possible disadvantages that can happen

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you during your journey.

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, be aware of keeping yourself safe because there are a lot of wild animals and insects in the evenings.

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, the weather is not always good in those places too. So, be careful and look into

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. As you know, I love holidays and going to sightseeing places and I really wanted to go on

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holiday with you, but I have already planned how to spend my summer time in Dubai with my family. Sorry about that and I hope that we can go together the next time. Yours faithfully Pulat

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Content

Provide a more detailed explanation on why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. Include specific activities or experiences that might appeal to your friend.

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When describing the disadvantages, consider offering solutions or precautions that your friend can take. This will make your advice more constructive.

Tone

To improve the tone, try adding more personal touches or enthusiasm when talking about the possibility of camping together in the future. This could make the letter feel more personal and warm.

Structure

Ensure that each paragraph sticks to a single idea but try to expand a bit more on each point with examples or personal anecdotes to make the letter more engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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7 paragraphs

180 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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