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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people.

#countries #home #people
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Nowadays, having a place
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live
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 is credited to one of the most important basic
need
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 in our society. While
people
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 in some countries believe that owning a
home
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 is a great deal, it might be a contentious issue for some
people
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 who live in the big cities considering the payment that
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 higher than renting for it. We must acknowledge that owning a
home
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 could be a good investment. As the tremendous growth of interest rates have been recorded in some countries for a decade, it would be beneficial for us
investing
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 in
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 property.
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, it might be a greater number of growth would
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 place in the future.
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, owning a
home
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 could give us a guarantee in our lives in a better way at a moment.
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, investing in
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 type of property necessitates
people
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 an enormous capital of money. It would be difficult for
people
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 who live in big cities to fulfil
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 requirement. Not only the capital expenditures
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 but
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 operation and maintenance expenditures that should buyers think
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 investing in
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 property.
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, some
people
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does
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 not live for a long time in a specific city; they should move to another city (or even country) any time because of reasons relating to work.
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, it might be reasonable for
people
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 to choose a renting one, which is cheaper and affordable for
majority
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the majority
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 of citizens. In conclusion, it might be clear for me to believe that the importance of owning a
home
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 is a negative situation. Having a
rent
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rented
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home
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 might be suitable for
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 of
people
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 in big cities in
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 modern and highly expensive era.
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