Some people think that it is more important to plant tree in open areas of towns and cities than to build more housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Developing the urban designs of
a
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cities
is a key factor
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promoting its residences’ quality of life. Open
areas
of these
cities
have become a controversial topic. While some people argue that these spaces should be occupied as housings, others, and I support the idea of utilizing them in planting trees as
this
definitely participates in solving some environmental issues and benefits the
city
’s residences.
To begin
with, we should protect our
environment
and work on increasing the green
areas
in a
city
.
This
would help in mitigating several environmental problems. To illustrate
this
, a recent study conducted in February 2021 by the
environment
preservation committee of the Gulf Cooperation Council (GCC), emphasized that planting 6
millions
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tree in gulf states would possibly
participates
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in solving
greenhouse
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effect and
this
would result in decreasing the Gulf region’s average temperature about 7 to 9 degrees. As
this
example shows, planting new trees is a contributory factor in solving one of the most problematic issues which
is
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greenhouse
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effect.
Thus
, developing the open
areas
in a
city
to be green has a positive impact on the
environment
which is more important than increasing the number of housings.
On the other hand
, as more and more housing buildings construct in a
city
, the living of its inhabitants become difficult. These
newvillas
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new villas
and apartment buildings would likely increase the population density. Capital
cities
in Egypt, namely Cairo and Alexandria, have been experiences a plethora of traffic jams which make moving around these
cities
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a nightmare.
This
difficulty resulted mainly from the enormous rate of these
cities
population censuses.
This
example makes it clear that increasing the number of accommodation buildings in
cities
probably has a negative outcome on their citizens’’ life.
Hence
, dealing with open
areas
in a
city
as potential spaces for building new dwellings is not a practical alternative. To conclude, due to the advantageous impact on
environment
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and maintaining a good standard of living in many
cities
, I entirely concur with planting new trees in the open spaces of a
city
rather than transforming
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areas
to be built for housing.
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