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Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it isn’t appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #support #animals #medicines #humans #isn’t #experiments
The bar chart illustrates how the British population was employed in four major industrial sectors over the period of 1910 to 2010. The unit of measurement is in millions. Overall, the service sector experienced the fastest growth and had employed more people than the other three sectors combined.
In contrast
, fewer Britons were working in agriculture, energy and manufacturing by 2010 than in 1910. Since 1910, the service sector has demonstrated a strong upward trend. It attracted approximately four times the initial number of people by 2010, which exceeded the 20
million
 mark. Manufacturing
initially
 had the most employees around five
million
 and showed significant fluctuation in number. It peaked in 1950 at approximately 8
million
 after which it had fallen into decline. Energy and construction and agriculture were the two sectors with the least growth. They followed a similar trend and gradually fell from providing jobs for approximately 3.5
million
 and 2.8
million
 people in 1910 to fewer than 2
million
 each in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • medical research
  • medications
  • procedures
  • assess
  • safety
  • effectiveness
  • genetic similarities
  • predict
  • ethical considerations
  • morality
  • alternatives
  • pain
  • suffering
  • innovation
  • computer models
  • cell cultures
  • exploit
  • advancements
  • implemented
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