In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In many nations, young
children
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are involved in different types of employment. It is believed by some that
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an approach is completely inaccurate, whereas others consider it to provide work understanding. While working at
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age can teach them knowledge of
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, I believe that more than that focusing only on studies is crucial to secure a better future. Getting employed at a younger age can help
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in knowing the key aspects of the job
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. Many
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while working will get to know about the latest technologies which are valuable in the market and based on that they can plan their study courses.
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will help them in selecting those areas that can guarantee them a better job later on.
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, many
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in Argentina who had worked in some employments during childhood gets employed at a reputed organization after their studies. Despite
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I believe that during school age, students should only concentrate on their education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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