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In many countries, people are moving away from rural areas towards urban areas. Why do you think that is? What problems can this cause?

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Moving away from rural areas towards urban zones is becoming increasingly normal in many countries. A huge number of people are choosing big
cities
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 to live in in order to improve their life´s quality.
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 and how
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 can affect the
city
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's public services.
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 with, most rural societies choose to move away because they seek a better life standard that cannot be achieved where they live. The main cause is that in urban zones, the amount of hospitals or health-care attention centres is much more than in the countryside.
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, the quality is better because of the fact that it is easier to get medical supplies.
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, normally if someone has an accident in a
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, an ambulance normally would need around 15 to 20 minutes in order to arrive at the place while in the rural areas the delay can be up to more than one hour.
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, the probability of getting faster health care is higher in the
cities
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 than in the countryside. Something
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 can create serious problems for the residents as a consequence that some of their public services may collapse . All
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 are prepared to hold a certain amount of population, when those numbers are surpassed delays in the transportation system or in the medical centres start appearing.
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, the subway system from the
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 where I live, Buenos Aires, can transport 150 persons between stations every 10 minutes. When I started using it two years ago, I always got in the
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 car that arrived,
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 nowadays it's normal that I have to wait
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 until I´m able to get in. In conclusion, people always try to seek a better quality of life, as a
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 society is choosing to live in a
city
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instead
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 of the countryside.
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 some places can start having problems in their public system.

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