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Prevention is better than cure. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measures. To what extent do you agree?

#prevention #cure #diseases #measures
Proper treatment of
diseases
 can be an expensive process;
therefore
, taking precautions before
disease
 progression seems like the cheaper alternative. While I admit that prevention is better than cure, I agree that it is not always possible to ward off some
diseases
 without scientific researches.
Firstly
,
to begin
 with, there are lots of illnesses on the earth which can be prevented with the help of proper hygienic practices.
For example
, Dengue is a deadly
disease
 that affects the blood cells of the human body.
However
, it can be avoided through careful management of waste and the installation of mosquito meshes in living areas. If people do not follow the precautionary methods, they are more likely to be infected by that
disease
.
Therefore
, it is vital for us to take precautions in order to stay safe from some
diseases
.
Secondly
, the treatment processes for some specific
diseases
such
 as cancer or diabetes are so pricey, due to which the underprivileged people cannot afford the medication.
In addition
, isolation strategies to prevent the widespread infection of the virus cost an arm and a leg for the government. At the same time, it is cheaper when investing in research into annihilating cancer risk factors or manufacturing vaccines for the virus.
For example
, according to a survey every year a large amount of money is by governments on treating chronic illness.
However
, there is enough evidence that it is difficult to combat a few infections even after being extremely careful. In
such
 cases, there is hardly any other alternative except working on a new medicine.
For instance
, a huge population across the world got affected by the novel coronavirus. Despite the fact that most people use masks and sanitisers, the virus has managed to infect many of them. In
such
 cases, we need to research more on the causative agent of that
disease
 and come with the new medicine. To conclude, though there are exceptional factors, I think it is better to be more aware of one’s own health than spending money on treating
diseases
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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