With the increased of global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources.

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It’s argued that we should have
access
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to unused land to exploit resources because we are short on supplies.
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, discovering more areas to make use of it for oil and
gas
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could lead to
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impact on the environment. Some people will take advantage of it for beneficial purposes and not recovered the damage they have done. If we don’t let them
access
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to
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more
of
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oil and
gas
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, it would encourage other industries to change
source
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their source
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of
energy
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. There are
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that companies, for
there
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their
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own benefit, constantly destroying thousands and
millions
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hectares of land. Since it’s expensive for companies to recovered
those area
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that area
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, most of them will find a way to avoid the fees.
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continue
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to happen as people keep wipe off
forest
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the forest
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and not restore will end up
over consumption
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overconsumption
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of natural
resource
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.
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,
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Brazil where most parts of the Amazon rainforest are, is rapidly reported
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to being
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being legally exploit
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being legally exploited
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. It
cause
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indiscriminate exploitation of
resource
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and the price of each hectare of the forest to driven down to just 160 dollars in 2020.
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of using
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renewable
unreliable
energy
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such
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as oil and
gas
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, we could use other power sources that won’t
dwindled
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in the future. If we used renewable
energy
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, we won’t be short on supplies and concerned about dealing with it. Even when we have more
access
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to more areas, the natural
resource
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will
be dwindled
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shortly, so it would
better
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be better
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to have an unlimited source of
energy
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. Solar
energy
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is an example, the sun generates
into
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electricity for factories to work. Because the
gas
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and fuel
not
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are not
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being produce
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everyday
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, the people that live near that area won’t have to suffer from the chemicals
polluted
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the air. In conclusion, the world is short on
resource
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for industrial purposes and demand on continue to exploit more.
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, we
shoudn’t
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shouldn't
wouldn't
have
access
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to undiscovered areas since it will
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negatively on the
evironment
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environment
.
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, we could use
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of
energy
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for the better.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global demand
  • finite resources
  • energy consumption
  • exploiting
  • untouched ecosystems
  • carbon emissions
  • climate change
  • renewable energy
  • sustainable energy solutions
  • geopolitical consequences
  • territorial disputes
  • dependency
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