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Today food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumers. Why is this? Is it a positive or negative trend？

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Nowadays, an increasing amount of
food
people
 buy is from farms thousands of miles away. Some
argues
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 that it is beneficial for
the
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society while others consider it harmful. Indeed, the long journey of
food
 resulted from many reasons and has brought both merits as well as demerits. It is difficult to determine which one is stronger. The distant
food
 transportation can be attributed to globalization and
technology
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 progress. In the modern world, transactions between countries or even continents are taking place more regularly, including
food
 and drinks.
People
 are willing to purchase
food
 from abroad and the international transportation system enabled the delivery of
food
, maintaining it fresh at the same time.
Therefore
,
people
 are able to enjoy
food
 travelled thousands of miles with high freshness. On one hand, the travel of
food
 is advantageous for both consumers and producers. With overseas
food
 shipped to domestic shops,
people
 can have their diet enriched without going abroad. The abundant menu
also
expand
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 the nutrients consumers obtained through their
food
. For producers, they can specialize in what they are skilled in
instead
 of producing all types of
food
. Taking advantage of
economics
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 of scales, products with lower costs and higher quality is made, adding the profit producers receive.
Moreover
, global transactions prevent wars and conflicts as well. If countries are all producing and exporting what they are good at while importing other
food
, they become mutually dependent.
On the other hand
, the delivery of
food
 is leading to pollution and driving up the
food
 price. No matter what type of transportation method
people
 use, there will be pollutants emitted to the air or the sea, worsening the environment.
Besides
, retaining freshness
also
 leads to pollution, aggravating the environmental problem. What is more, the transport cost will be a part of the
food
 price, consumers have
then
 to pay more in return
of
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 foreign
food
. All things considered, it can be now concluded that long-distance
food
 travels take place due to globalization and advanced technology. Positive effects include a wider choice of
food
, lower cost because of large scale production along with
reduction
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a reduction
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 in wars and conflicts resulted from
mutual-dependency
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. Negative effects involve environmental pollution and high
food
 price. Overall,
food
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 journey is double-edged since there are both advantages and disadvantages.
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