Some people belive that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Society always provides us comfort and knowledge of our culture and etiquettes. It is our job to give them something in return. So there is a school of thought who thinks that the younger
generation
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should do some of society's
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voluntarily and for free as it will not only help our community but
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in the development of our youth. I personally completely agree with
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thought and I will shed my views on
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topic in
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essay.
Firstly
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, our communities always
runs
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various organisations which helps people in
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.
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as
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providing food to homeless people or old age houses or orphanages etc.
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,
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organisations
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runs
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on donations and trust funds which always keeps them
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. In
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case, when teenagers apply for doing
work
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here voluntarily and for free it will not only
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them to improve their behaviours but it
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provide
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relief to
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organisations as they don't have to hire
personnels
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personnel
to do
work
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for them.
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, when the younger
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starts working with
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communities it helps them to develop character.
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, it develops
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of helping others, aware
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problems in society and it creates
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conscience
confidence
in themselves.
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in their
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teenage
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age
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it helps them to keep them busy and away from other distractions. Namely, it keeps them away from drug abuse, violence etc.
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Also
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people in their
teen age
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are always competitive in every
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so when they start
work
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here they can compete with each other and get more and more
work
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done. Not only that but they set good examples and
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create perfect good role models for their
generation
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and the
generation
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next
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. To sum up, I reiterate that
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this communities
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should come up with some kind of rewards to motivate children who
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good
work
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without any desire to get anything in return. Not but least it will help them to bring
communitiy
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community
communities
closer and understand it's problems at deeper levels.
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