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Internet technology means people do not need to travel to foreign countries to understand how others live. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the contemporary epoch, with the development of advanced technology, it is believed that
people
 are able to understand the lives of other countries
instead
 of travelling to that place via the invention of internet technology. During the course of
this
 essay, I would discuss
this
 statement in a careful and subjective manner before drawing a rational conclusion. It is undeniable to agree that thanks to the remarkable innovation of the internet
people
 in different continents are able to learn and understand not only their lives but
also
 their
culture
 and cuisine. To be specific,
people
 who have low income have the opportunity to travel with a click of the mouse to search for information
such
 as
culture
, landscapes, cuisine, or lifestyle.
Furthermore
,
this
 could be convenient for
people
 who have a language barrier and fear of aeroplanes and are still able to explore the
culture
 and cuisine or broaden their horizon across the globe at home with a cellphone or a laptop.
On the other hand
, it is argued that there are several issues that need to be concerned
such
 as real experience and unforgettable memories.
First
 and foremost, without travelling to a particular country, a traveller would not experience the real feelings of a breathtaking view or enjoy how delicious the food in that place is.
Additionally
, immersing oneself in a different
culture
, custom or lifestyle in another country with a variety of beautiful pictures accompanied with happiness and joy during the journey is kept in mind for forgettable memories entire whole life. In conclusion, there is a plethora of support for
this
 concern;
nonetheless
, there
is
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 some points of view that need to be considered following each individual.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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