In many Countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of Crime? How can we deal with those causes? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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technology-driven global world, In most

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crime

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happening and how can we solve it.

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increasing? We all are living in a

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competitive

world, so those who

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century technology have influenced our children as well as

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adults. Admittedly, there are more paid online

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going on , so more than 25% of our kids are addicted to

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and all are related to violence. At

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, they use their pocket money to play those

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once their money

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finished they will start to steal from home

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from others. Regarding youngsters, they are

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influenced

by drugs.

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, if they use

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they get an adrenalin rush so they will be more active and they

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know what they are doing,

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,for getting the kick they are ready to do any

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as , rash drive, misbehave with others even ready to do murder. I know a boy from my village , who was 20

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old he was a single child for his parents. he was addicted to alcohol and drugs, because of his pressure his father gifted him a new model bike and he made

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the bike and met with

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, he lost his life

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is happening daily.

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issue?

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education. Education should be

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and free of cost.

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result

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we can reduce

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unemployment

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, control on paid online

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especially

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violent game. keep an age limit for those

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limit the supply of drugs and alcohol or simply ban it. From

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level ,kids should learn the law, what are the punishments of crimes and all, so they will be afraid to do so , or else they will rethink before they attempt any crimes. To put it in a nutshell, I

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pen down

saying that, criminal offence are increasing day

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life,

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proper education and

employments

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employment

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can reduce

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number of offence. Every citizen should think , all others are your brothers and sisters, so you

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be doing any

crime

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against anyone.