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All students should study art & music in school to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Many have debated about learning arts &
music
 in school, some believe it required being part of education;
on the other hand
, people think academic education is more important rather than arts. I strongly consider arts should be part of a
study
 in primary schools and optional for high school student, it develops critical skills
such
 as
Art
 improve academic achievement &
music
 boots young brains. Children’s learn important skills in the early stage of the life in form of
art
, where they develop motor & visual skills. The united nations of America have conducted a survey in 2016 on learning forms of
art
 80% of students have shown more interest in subjects as result, the country has changed the education system for the young one's. painting and drawing help's to expand creativity,
for example
, a child learning about animals in form of a drawing will
toknow
Correct your spelling
to know
 remember the look, name, unique of an animal. every school should encourage the pupils to participate in the artwork. A
study
 has proven that listening to
study
music
 helps the brain to improve concentration, reduce anxiety or stress while studying. To illustrate
this
 listening to Mozart
music
 could enhance intelligence as to be beneficial for intake of vital information relaxing
music
 for studying can help to ease the nerves servers to beat the pre-exam anxiety.
music
 can disconnect you from the other background noise can improve concentration more in the
study
. In conclusion, every student given opportunity to learn
art
 &
music
 in schools mainly it keeps the young one's to be more creative and reduce the anxiety with all that said equal importance should be given whether it is a craft or academic.
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