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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
In recent years, the trend toward female education has been totally changed. A section of society thought that males and females do not have any kind of discrimination based on
gender
. That's why
universities
 need to allocate fifty per cent seats for females. I partially agree with
this
 statement and I think for some
subjects
this
 idea is good but other
subjects
 admissions are based on their qualification. In the course of the essay, I will argue my point of view.
First
 of all, there are professions that are equally in demand which cover both
gender
 problems. In most countries, people are not discussing their problems with the opposite
gender
. In these
subjects
,
universities
 should need to reserve half of the
admission
 for girls
although
 they have their basic education requirements.
For instance
, In the medical field have a number of situations where the opposite
gender
 does not feel comfortable discussing their personal health issues.
In addition
, the same situation happens in the judiciary their women better pursue other women trials rather than men. Some occupations need a good qualification.
Secondly
. a lot of jobs demand well educated and experienced people, so in that
subjects
,
universities
 give
admission
 on their qualification rather than reservation. Government and parents need to put light on those areas which are weak in boys and girls and they get their
admission
 on merit.
For example
, an engineer who came from that process of reservation and they design a thing that will be used by many people, if it will not work properly and got an accident
then
 who is responsible. In conclusion, In some
subjects
 where human lives are not involved there,
universities
 reserve half of the
admission
 for women while in those
subjects
 where human lives are involved their
admission
 are based on merit in
universities
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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