Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, The

Death

penalty becomes the only significant way to control barbaric criminal activities to provide a society peaceful environment,

although

, few people deem it extremely terrible to take a human life under the name of judicial law. In the upcoming paragraphs, I will discuss why I reckon it is essential.

First

of all, Many heinous crimes are increasing day by

day

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such

as molestations, rapes and murders. Convicts never feel guilty about what they are doing, and, set free after 5 to 15 years of imprisonment by the fragile law system. They take it as their pride.

On the contrary

, If a criminal gets a

death

execution, it will teach other wrongdoers to think twice to conduct

such

dreadful acts. In 2013, a study has done in Germany. It concludes that crime rates have decreased by 40% after a serial killer is hanged to

death

. he got capital punishment after a proven accusation of killing his wife.

In addition

, many developed and under-developed countries spend high budgets to put inmates in jail for a lifetime.

This

money must be used for the welfare of the nation.

For example

, in building schools and hospitals.

Moreover

, it is the responsibility of a state to provide justice to the victims or the family of innocents. In 1998, a 5 years old boy was raped by 6 men which

was

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unbearable by the child's parents. They showed genuine gratitude to the lawmakers who helped them to seek justice by

death

punishment via electrocution of all 6 rapists.

However

, I have visualized that sometimes innocent people got

death

penalties, but, with time they have been found guilty by the authorities. So, there should a body who looks for all the proof and make sure that a genuine criminal is getting an execution. I am ending up

this

controversial debate by being strongly in favour of judicial

death

which is an imperative step to make the world worth living.

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