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Many people these days have computer,laptop and telephone at their home for work .Do you think working from home has more advantage or disadvantage?

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In
this
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 era , working from
home
 is a debatable issue Since the beginning of the
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twenty
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first
 century, telecommuting has gotten
the
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momentum over the globe. The most important reason behind its popularity is, nowadays,
people
 have all modern facilities, which require to
work
 from
home
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,
such
 as a personal computer, a laptop and a mobile phone.
However
, it has some pros and cons, which are explained in trailed paragraphs. Working from
home
 is indeed
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 emerging trend in
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today's
todays
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 society. Some
people
 believe working from
home
 is quite
benefitual
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beneficial
 but fail to realize its
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 consequences.
However
, I firmly disagree with
this
 emerging trend due to its devasting consequences .
Firstly
, working from
home
 lacks the
fulfillment
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 of providing a specific environment
which
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 an individual requires.
Moreover
 , internet issues can be witnessed in an individuals
work
 due to weak connection which may lead to loss of
work
 .
Therefore
 its the responsibility of the government to provide the necessary facilities.
Individual
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 may be surrounded by
same
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 environment which may lead to
lack
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 of concentration in
his
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 specific
work
For instance
, a few
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 companies in the UK
,
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 were surveyed that, in the global market, telecommuters are less successful than
people
 working in the offices. Looking at the positive side, working from
home
, gives employees
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plenty of time to spend with their kith and kin. It can make working women's lives easier to look after their children at the same time, while they are working.
Additionally
,
people
 can freely
work
 without the bother of any supervisor .
For example
, a recent survey, carried by the American Labour Association, has revealed that telecommuters are more productive, as they can
work
 efficiently from their own choice of place. To conclude, despite its quite a few merits,
demerits
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 of
this
 cannot be overlooked. So, I think the disadvantages of
this
 new culture outweigh the advantages.
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