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Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opnion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.

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Several people think that children are taught by
schools
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 how to be
a good
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a good parent
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parents
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. It would be a good idea. In my point of view, I agree with
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 concept because to be an ideal family they can learn from
schools
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.
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, I consider
skills
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 that the person desires to be a great mother or father are
leadership
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skills
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 and
well organized
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skills
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. The reason why I agree with it is to be
a good
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a good parent
good parents
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parents
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 they can learn in
schools
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. Some young ages do not have a delighted family, so teachers should teach them how to be great
parents
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. Based on my local school,
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has a session
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 called Wonderful Family. It teaches about how to be nice
parents
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. Every student has to learn it.
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 of
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 course, some students grow up to have their families. They have great
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 to look after theirs. The
skills
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 which are significant to be a good mother or father are
leadership
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skills
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 and
well
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being well
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 organized. I think these two
skills
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 are absolutely amazing.
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,
leadership
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skills
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is
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 the primary skill that I consider because when some people have their own children they must be leaders in every step of their kids' lives.
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, being well organized is another device which
parents
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 should have. Because they have many things that they carry on
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 as taking care of their children, doing housework and going out to do their jobs. So, they have to organize all of their duties. In conclusion, I agree with
this
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 idea because to be a delighted parent they should learn in
schools
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. And
leadership
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skills
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 and being well organized are major devices an ideal parent should have.
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